It’s obviously pretty novice, and the subject matter is r o u g h, but I don’t think it’s bad. Needs more art to it, but I think it’ll evolve.
Just sprang out of my head while I was in the shower and I scribbled it down while it was fresh. Never happened to me before.
Ok. Hope it’s not too trite.
Oh it’s the free verse kind. I don’t think it’s bad. A good poem (of any kind; I specialize in sestinas for example) is one you can feel, and I could relate to the vibes.
Thanks!
Is this your first one?
Yes it is!